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Vaughn 4 by Tazzman777
As a subject, you're beautiful. Your positioning is good, your body is nice to look at. Like in some of my other critiques, the one thing that leaps out at me is all the extra stuff. The clutter on the bed is distracting. The eye wants to focus on your beautiful butt but the cord, the device, the extra "stuff" in the shot is distracting. It would be a much better piece if you'd give some thought to your surroundings and don't let them take away from you, as a subject. If you're wanting to improve, make yourself the focus and clear away all that extra stuff.
Vaughn 5 by Tazzman777
Since you asked for critique, I'll take a stab at it.

You're obviously the model so I'll address the comments to you. I've looked at a lot of your other pieces and you're comfortable with yourself. That's the best thing about these pieces. That can also be the worst thing because with yourself as the subject, you might have a tendency to ease up on the technical side of your photo. This one, for instance, has some strange issues that are repetitious - too much "stuff" in the shot that take away from you, as the subject. Black and white photos are tricky if there's a lot of patterns and textures. Notice the lines in the background, the printed pillowcases, the sheets and such - it's a lot for the eye to process. You get a little lost. You want to be the focus of the piece - take away the pillows, and hit the left side of your handsome face with some light. That makes you the central focus.
Vaughn 1 by Tazzman777
You have a very cute model with a very nice backside! You have an interesting idea for a series with him as the feature and I think it would be successful!

There is a serious lighting and composition problem here. Notice how the intense shadow on his eyes makes them look deeper and the shadow from his nose causes his lips to fade into his face. Just the slightest bit of side lighting would take care of this issue. Composition-wise, the shot looks cluttered - all the pillows (with their ragged tags) and the jeans, it all just looks thrown together and not very thought out.

You could clean up this image by doing simple things. Clearing the bed, getting whatever that is between his legs out of the way, taking his socks off, tilting his head just a bit.

You have a great beginning, to be sure, it could just use some work.
sleep boy by illicitDreamer
I think you have a solid concept and a beautiful model. There are elements to him that are intriguing, for sure.

Your model is a stunning beauty. The different skin tones, the peaceful expression and the gorgeous body hair are all strong points. All of these things against the busy pattern of whatever he's lying on is distracting.

The other distraction - and my main difficulty - is the hard cropping of this image. The top of his head is cut off, his other leg is cut off, as well. If your idea was to focus on his chest, then the cropping could have been tighter. If that wasn't the idea, then why not include all of his beautiful body? This cropping is just a little odd and somewhat jarring.

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I've been writing and drawing for an adult publication since around 2008 and I've had my work featured on ONE cover. ONE! A few days ago, I asked them why this is. This was the response:

we generally tend to use our most popular artists on the cover, because theirs is the artwork that seems to grab the attention of customers in the bookstores. Although we do like and appreciate the work you do for us, it simply isn’t as eye-catching as that of ****** or Michael Mitchell, for example.

I’m not sure if your technique has anything to do with it, but sometimes your artwork comes of as a bit flat and “static” in comparison to some of our other artists.

I hope you find this constructive.

Now, this is a bit of a blow to my ego and a devastation to me. I'm a self-taught artist and I thought I was doing pretty amazing stuff. "Flat" and "Static"?! These two things, in reference to art, are death strokes! Now, I admit that I don't know that much about shading and how to round off certain things to make them pop! Without someone pointing to this website or that website - what could/can I do to fix this?! Another question, for all the times that I've BEGGED for critique, why am I just not getting this information?! I thought a community of artists helped one another!!!
  • Listening to: The world cave in
  • Reading: the writing on the wall
  • Watching: my "art career" plummet
  • Playing: with all the cards
  • Eating: junk food with junk food sides!
  • Drinking: nasty water!

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Brutus9000 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2014
Thanks 4 the faV~
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Furyian Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2014   Photographer
You're most welcome! Thanks for sharing your work!
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Brutus9000 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2014
:)
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neatfrek Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks for liking my photos! Much appreciated! :-)

Awesome work here. It would be awesome to be a part of your portfolio some day!
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Furyian Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2014   Photographer
PM me a location and I'll see if that could happen!!
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davidsobe Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks for adding my work to your favorites and for the photoshop advice!  Athletic Supporter 3 by davidsobe    
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Furyian Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2014   Photographer
You're very welcome! I'm glad that you took the advice in the generous, giving manner it was intended! Hope it helps and I look forward to more of your work!
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Kedori Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Always happy to see my latest work being added to your favourites.  Always appreciated.
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Furyian Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014   Photographer
I'm a little bit of a fan. Love 
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Kedori Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It does not go unnoticed or unappreciated!
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